HSA 2007 English Item 24

The student paragraph below requires revisions and edits. Read the paragraph. Then answer Numbers 24 through 26.

This student paragraph requires revisions and edits. Read the paragraph. Then answer the following:

Which of these is the best way to revise Sentence 4 for clarity and effectiveness?

1. After the rules are read aloud, the joust begins with a trumpet call.
2. After the rules are read aloud as well as after a trumpet call, the joust begins.
3. The rules are read aloud, and the joust begins as there is a loud call by the trumpet.
4. There is a loud trumpet call, and then the joust begins after the rules are read aloud.